Today we practised descriptive writing. We worked on expanding an event and on showing emotion rather than telling. We also talked about VOICE. Here are some of the lines I really enjoyed from your journals today.
Our topic: The Cypress boys vs. girls snowball fight last Tuesday.
Victoria
The girls were jumping up and down. Some of us were gasping for air, and lots of toes were numb.
Jenny
Everyone snapped to attention and ran outside.
The boys were throwing snowballs with the light of fight in their eyes.
Jillian
We could feel the heat on each other's bodies and the tension in each other's faces.
The girls would not be denied.
Kaden
And now, I've got to go - the girls are coming!
Nicholas
We ate our snack to get ready for battle.
Our arms were like cannons, our snowballs like cannonballs (good simile!)
Alyza
My heart was racing, I had a shiver down my spine
I jumped up and fell to the snowy ground.
Khayali
Nicholas's hands formed into fists, but he still surrendered.
The hair was standing up on the backs of their necks, but they were ready for battle.
Gabi
Ewan shot a dirty look at the girls and the fight for justice began.
Eli
It was just me and Chuck Norris. (??!)
Adrian
I quickly threw a snowball and Gabi fell over like an avalanche (another fitting simile!)
Ewan
Just then we heard thumps.
In the misty, icy forest we came upon a wide snow valley.
Sahra
If there was one day to live for, it would be today.
The boys immediately got to work, hearts pumping, ready for an invasion.
With not the slightest hint of fear, the girls advanced.
Sophie
My heart pounded like an eagle furiously flapping it's wings.
I clenched my fists. I picked up an icy snowball that felt cold against my soaked hand.
Lucy
Tears fell down our puffy faces.
Yash
Our fearless captain, Ms.Cannon yelled with joy, "there it is, the Hollyburn lodge!"
Jed
Deadly snow was flying, burning like fire crackling on trees, painful, relaxing, warm, and cold. The girls were going in for an attack, but I said "No, fight back. Never stop."
Aleksei
She was as tall as the frozen trees. We all knew this was not going to be easy.
They were tired. Their eyes looked down as if they were crying. They tried not to show it.
Amanda
The girls shouted as loud as they could, hands in the air jumping up and down. They jumped so high it looked like they were going to touch the sky.
Awesome job, 3C! I love the way you are bringing your writing to life with description and VOICE! It looks like we will have to have a rematch in the snow one day :)